I’m still gonna finish off this chapter with Navy, but I’m getting the sense that it’s not a very popular chapter. At least, according to some of the people I talk to regularly about it. I don’t think there’s anything particularlly wrong with it, but I’m the writer and I can’t see things the way you readers do.
Anyways, do you think this chapter is annoying to read? Yes, Navy is supposed to be unlikable; the intention being for you readers to feel confused as to why any of the main characters would support her. She’s supposed to be a jibberjabber who won’t shut up… but in doing do, did I over do things?
I want this chapter to be readable and I don’t want to scrap it outright either. The programmer in me says “just go back to the last stable version and start back up from there”… I personally think that the story was stable up until the last few pages. I’ll admit those were really really wordy and really fuck up the eyes. Maybe I should just start from there?
That aside, I could use as much advice on this chapter as possible. What do you guys think??